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Category: October 2013 Critique Corner

October 2013 Critique Corner

October Stories!

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

You’re in for a treat today. 🙂 It's story day… Let the critiquing begin! We have five story starts written by five awesome writers! Each story start is posted separately with its own comment box. Just go to the post below this one to see Story # 1. Keep scrolling down to see each of the other stories… Continue reading October Stories!

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October 2013 Critique Corner

Story # 1

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

Title:          The Chain Author:      Adam Y. Detroit 2036- “McNabb skating down the ice, up on a breakaway, approaching the Blazers net… McNabb takes the shot.  He SCORESSS!!!” screams the Rebels commentator. I always knew my special chain on my neck supposedly gave me good luck.  But, I didn’t think it was enough to have me… Continue reading Story # 1

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October 2013 Critique Corner

Story # 2

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

Title:          SecretsAuthor:     Jade Devereaux"Sit with me. Just for a second. It won't take that long. I just want to talk," her voice rings out in the dark room.The windows are cracked and there's a draft, the cold November air seeping through.He stops in his tracks, heart hammering in his chest. "You figured it out?" he… Continue reading Story # 2

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October 2013 Critique Corner

Story # 3

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

Title:         Scary Story Author:     Ben B. October, 26 2013 Ben woke up knowing that he had a very big day ahead of him, On Saturday morning he had a Halloweenie tournament in Batavia, NY. He would play three games in one day with an hour in between. A ghost told him that if he did not… Continue reading Story # 3

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October 2013 Critique Corner

Story # 4

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

Title:          2076Author:     RileyThe minute Max slammed the newspaper on the lunch table in front of me, I knew something was up. "Boston Tea Party," the caption read. It was my mother's newspaper."What's this?"Max's face is grim, his eyes like stone. "Last night some... rebels from the government-- they were Minors--threw tea in Boston Harbor. I don't… Continue reading Story # 4

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October 2013 Critique Corner

Story # 5

October 30, 2013March 13, 2014 Jackie Yeager

Title:         The Relationship Author:     Sarah W. Once there was this girl named Sarah and she had 2 WEIRD friends named Olivia and Shanna. And they were friends since kindergarten. They loved sleeping at Sarah’s house. And Sarah’s maid was named Brian and her pink limo driver was named Ryan (they weren’t very good). They got paid… Continue reading Story # 5

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